second draft of music magazine front cover

This is my second draft of my front cover. In this draft I took
into account the improvements I noted in the post about my first draft of my front cover.
First of all, I changed the cover lines' font to the second most popular font which is referred in my target market questionnaire. However, I was at a disadvantage as my photoshop at home holds a limited amount of fonts meaning that the font for my cover lines were not available and so I had to find a font similar to the font which I originally wanted. This also disrupted my selling line. As you can see my selling line is a different font from last time. This was unintentional as my original plan was to change the size of it. However, my version of photoshop didn't recognise the font and so changed it to another font. To fix I will have to change the fonts for both the cover lines and the selling line back to the fonts I want them to be using the photoshop available in my school's computer system. The result of this will be shown in my third draft.
I, secondly erased the gaussian blur on the forehead of my model to the hairline could look more natural. This makes the model look a bit less 'fake' than before. For the selling line, I completely changed it. I tried to make it more exciting using informal language as well as directing it to the audience; however, I'm not sure if this did the trick. The word "jammin'" might be considered as colloquial language as you would only expect it to be said but not written; this also adds to the excitement. The last feature I changed was the font size of the dateline and the price. I made it smaller so there is more negative space surrounding them. This was also annoying to change since the font was unrecognisable and so I had to change that font too. From doing all of this, this is the result I got. As you can see, there is not much of a difference from the first draft, but there are small improvements in this version which may or may not be recognisable.